Fallout Equestria: Honestum Corda

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Fallout Equestria: Honestum Corda

Postby Silver Tongue » Wed Mar 28, 2012 2:32 am

Well ive been reading allot of FoE fanfics and have come to a conclusion.
im going to write my own.
Im looking for advice and posting my idea here so i dont steal any ideas on accident.

Fallout Equestria: Honestum Corda

Setting: Far northwest Equestria, Much like Oregon and Washinton based, Heavily Wooded Alot of logging trails traveled on, the region was a minor target of the zebras in the great war and suffered only two megaspell attacks. Stable 39 is in the dead center of the Forested region but silver will eventually break out into to the great plains based region. 6 weeks before the events of ''Fallout Equestria''

Story:
A lonely, depressed, keep-to-himself buck is all of a sudden cast out of stable 39 and must survive the dangerous Marelem forest looking for a over-the-top Emotional mare and his place in the wasteland, only to come across a sinister plot threatening to consume all of northwest equestria.

Silver Tongue

Unicorn Buck
Coat: White
Eyes: Silver
Mane: pink with a black streak
Tail: Black
No cutie mark

is accustomed to being ignored and picked on by the rest of stable 39 except one mare which loved him deeply, but always pushed her away out of a deep down fear, enjoys every second of his self wallowing and has constant thoughts of suicide which drive him to a point of insanity in which he makes a powerful decision of life or death. meets some companions along the way on his lonely adventures, he has an alternate self that can talk anyone into doing just about anything, that is always making snide remarks at the back of his conscience, has a natural instinctive abilities of melee and unarmed combat, but uses his talking skills to settle conflicts most of the time. has a family heritage of some sort but i wont spoil it.

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has the ''Impartial meditation trait'' (yes I made it a trait, Shoot me :bjshrug: )
along with ''Heavy handed''

Spells (the spells highlighted with a * are ones that he learns throught out the story)
- a defensive shield*
- levitation (of course)
- telekinetic Umbrella (doesn't like to get wet)
- Pulse (robots n' stuff)*
- Telekinetic Spear*
- Tele-charge (Diablo 2 Paladin style)*
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Postby Silver Tongue » Wed Mar 28, 2012 2:34 am

Yeeeaaaa lots'o'typos in there, Damn headache....
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Re: Advice?

Postby Pinkie Pie! » Wed Mar 28, 2012 1:45 pm

well, if you're having Silver Tongue come out of a stable, here's a list of used ones: Stables
the idea of a pacifist pony who will talk his way out of a situation rather than shoot is pretty original for as far as I know and definitely challenging.
For the rest it might be a good idea to have a basic idea of what you want to tell your readers with your story. What kind of situations do you want to introduce him too, is there any sort of overhanging plot, what are his motivations?
Try to figure that all out and get a basic concept of the story.

That's all for now.

P.S. Heh, I used a character named Silver Tongue too in my fic, pretty much the opposite of your character though as he was an antagonist. Just mentioning it because it amuses me, no problem whatsoever with the name of your character.
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Re: Advice?

Postby Silver Tongue » Wed Mar 28, 2012 5:51 pm

yea, but ive played through fallout new vegas pacifist i acually try to kill less in all the fallout games :l
(more reward) i have a steady idea on this, And not to mention paralizing needler pistols :DD
plus he will have companions that look to him for a plan of some sort.

will most often use turrets and industrial robots to his advantage, the pacifist thing is he cant wield a gun and shoot a living pony, robots and insects are tolerable. animals?
Animal friend perk?
Oh! and thank you for that link! :mrgreen:
and thanks for confimation of his name that really kills my guilt :)
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Re: Advice?

Postby Silver Tongue » Wed Mar 28, 2012 8:29 pm

New side character!
Trade Wind- young pegasi philly
Cant fly :(
has a accent and attitude similar to apple-bloom
Her ears are notched due to living in the marelem forest.
No cutie mark
Coat: Gray with cheek freckles
Eyes: blue and teal (multicolored)
Mane: short crimson with teal streak(s)?
Tail: black braid
Skills:Has survival and cooking skills, not to mention bieng a young hunter Trade is proficient with her .32 rifle, Moondancer.

Origin: born earth pony parents (due to a rare genetic occurence), her mother died when she was a foal and her father left before she was born, Barely remembers them, see's Silver as a brotherly figure and as the only protector she has.
Wears a Bow, says her family has kept it for generations.
living alone in her family's shack until slavers looted, burned it and took her as slave.
Silver discovers her on his travels in a dead slaver camp slaughtered by a mysterious creature and her trapped inside a cage with shackles. Due to the forged on shackles she is slow and loud, causing her to tire easly and ride on silver's back.
becomes attached to silver over time, likes to ride on his back, which he doesn't enjoy Thinks maroon is crazy, which silver can relate to, but then pushes silver towards her.
due to her not having a cutie mark silver saw her as the only person he can complain with about not having one.
(did i meantion he never got one?)
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Re: Advice?

Postby Sgt Muffin » Thu Mar 29, 2012 4:41 am

I like your ideas, and I can't wait for you to come out with a story because this sounds really interesting.
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Re: Advice?

Postby Silver Tongue » Thu Mar 29, 2012 11:15 pm

well, i just had to kill half of it for changes...
sooooo....
i dont know if it might be similar to other fanfics, i wanted this to be unique, and it will...

And, omg i love your avatar!

anyways i got chp 1 going so far its good, i thought it would be harder! im mean im having trouble with paragraphs but thats about it.
it'll suck but im still going!

Another new character! plays a major role in the story

Maroon!

has been obsessed with silver tongue since they were both foals, really his only friend but is hated by silver, he thinks she is immature crazy and childish, when deep down he's afraid, she has a happy, kind and some what spooky personality. was stable 39's champ mouth javelin thrower thus her cutie mark. ever since her and silver's ''incident'' in 39 she has been completely avoiding silver out of shame and has digressed slowly into alcoholism and is constantly intoxicated..... and bitchy. silver discovers her sleeping in the Alderhoof saloon with her face lying in a bile puddle.

unicorn mare

Mane: Crimson
Tail: Crimson
Coat: dark turquoise
Eyes: blue
Cutie mark: 4 javelins crossed by another javelin
Skills: Talented melee weapon thrower, also adept with locks, sneaking and setting traps.

im not good with cutie marks, so i wont have any on the poys i put up but i will in drawings!
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Re: Advice?

Postby Silver Tongue » Fri Mar 30, 2012 5:59 am

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Re: Advice?

Postby Damhoof » Fri Mar 30, 2012 8:13 am

You need to grant ponies permission to access your chapter.
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Re: Advice?

Postby Pinkie Pie! » Fri Mar 30, 2012 8:53 am

what Damhoof said, in your gdoc page, there is a blue button with 'share' or on the top right. Press that and enable that people with the link can find the document. Also enable anyone to comment to make it easier for people to preread
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